Hey Youth!
Wow, great poem. I wasn't really sure what kind of comments you wanted - on the subject matter or objectively on the writing itself. Haven taken some poetry analysis in University, I would've done soe things different from a form-based point of view for more impact (but hey, thats personal). But as far as the subject matter and the what you were saying in the poem - all very real and very true. Lots of emotion. I think that it is something that most BLers can atleast relate to a part of. And yes, I agree that it reads very much like a song - oooh, a BLer band?! That would be fun!

Graces of God,
Deliverance